Is this story good? Sorry for the length.?

Its a good plot... every book is going to have someone that likes it. Plus, if you completed it and sent it to an editor, they would mess with your punctuation so don't worry about that :D. Seems like a fun book to write, I would continue. Don't you have to be 13 to be on Yahoo Answers? It's okay. I started writing books at age 9 (They FAIL)... so don't be sad you are young.